She cries and cries. There is nothing that she can do but cry. She looks at the sky, she cries. She looks at her own reflection in the mirror, she cries. She looks at the flowers she planted months ago in her small garden on the right side of her yard, she cries.
There are only tears, there, in her eyes, on her cheeks. Sometimes, on her blouse, on her hands, everywhere. There is nothing but tears.
Her neighbor, an old man of 40, never misses a single morning, looking at her from his balcony. He just watches and watches. He never says hi, or even waves his hand at her.
She knows that she has a spectator. But, she doesn't care. She doesn't need one.
He is now watching her again. But, this time, he has a telescope with him. He can see the details better now. He sees her tears. He feels sorry for her. He really does. He seems to be able to feel her pain although he doesn't know what causes it. He feels like crying, too. His heart is aching, wondering what has been done to her fragile heart.
She sees him, and his telescope.
Both his and the telescope's presence change nothing. She keeps crying. There is nothing she can do. She can only cry...for a reason that only she knows what.
She Can Only Cry
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Nadiah Alwi - Write at Home Mom
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such a sad a lovely story...
i like it.......
Nadiah, I want to know why she is crying. I want to know what the tears bring up for the man who is watching her... Even if we never find out why she is crying, wouldn't the man like to, even just from a distance and the imagination of his own mind? Maybe not. YOu are the author, you know best. I think it would be interesting if the woman's tears made the man remember someone he once loved.
Thank you for sharing your writing.
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This was beautifull! I wanderd what was in her mind, and why the tears cept falling. I liked the end very mutch becouse I`m still wandering what happened.
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Well that is sad.
Sad, But Thanks for posting
I like it! I like your style. It had a catchy feel to it. Thanks for posting. I just started with posting original fiction. Right now I only have one blog and it's filled with all kinds of different nonsense. Just posted my first original short though if your at all interested.
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It is interesting. I like it because I want to know why she is crying but it frustrates me because I know so little. It is a tough balance
It's so sad, I'd love to know more about this depressing girl though.
This is a wonderful story, it's so beautifully written, and really leaves me wanting to know more...a follow up? :)
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hey! its beautiful. i have been in her shoes, and i can feel the pain. sometimes, its important not to let anyone know, not even the reader.
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This was really sad but beautiful. It made me ask so many questions like why was she crying and why was that man always watching her. I think pieces that make you think and dig deep into the meaning behind the meaning are the best ones. Good job.
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I've been struggling to write something like this.
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You should totally do a follow up, I would like to know why she is crying???
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I like it just as much as your story!
I really did enjoy your post. It was so sad, but beautiful at the same time.
I like the story, it would be a great lead into another story. I'm anxious to find out more about the girl and why she is crying, and the man and why is watching.
it was good
I really liked your story.
It's interesting how you used the word 'she' instead of a name. I'm experimenting with that style too. I'm finding it hard when there is more than one female character. Often I find it's hard to tell who you're talking about, though I think you did that really well in this story! What do you think?
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Sad and interesting, I would love to know more about her. I love reading and writing short stories myself, so it's refreshing to find other like minds around.
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Sorry but this is bad. You didn't say why she was crying and that frustrates me.
Only kidding it was fantastic!! Although I would like a follow up :)
I liked your style... its almost like poetry, teasing and enticing... and now I want to know why she cries.
captivating story! would like to know more.
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A GOOD STORY
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It was supposed to be a very emotional story, but I didn't feel anything while reading it. There was this well full of pain, sorrow, melancholy, even depression, but you barely scraped the surface and the story came out to be more than a bit flat. Of course that's just my opinion and I'm not saying this to discourage you or anything. Consider it to be a constructive critic.
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Hey,
Thank you for this story... I read it twice. Once very fast. I wanted to know what was happening. After I knew it already I read it again. This time more pausadely. It was another story, then. It ells so much about our own life. And instead of focusing on the woman, I was thinking of the old man. And how sometimes we see suffering happening with ones we car. And how we try and we try to mke it better. But it is just not possible to help. Thank you again. I liked it very much.
Gustavo :)
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